Evie McKown

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Evie McKown

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Name: Evie Jessica McKown
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: Senior
School: John Endecott Memorial Academy
Hobbies and Interests: Swimming, health & fitness, animals & animal rights, history, video gaming, comic books.

Appearance: Evie is taller and broader than most girls her age, 5'11" tall and with a wide-shouldered build and small bust that give her quite a masculine figure. She weighs approximately 155lbs, mostly stored in lean muscle and a little excess body fat built up during the pandemic. Evie's colouration is typical of Anglo-Americans: fair-skinned and freckled, light brown hair that she wears short and often in a ponytail, and pale blue eyes. Her face contrasts with her figure, round and somewhat child-like with wide eyes and a button nose, her mouth average, and her overall features soft. Being self-conscious about her boyish appearance, Evie often wears subtle makeup to further soften her facial appearance. Thanks to her healthy lifestyle and diet, she has enjoyed clear skin throughout her adolescence.

Not a particularly fashion-conscious person, Evie's wardrobe is mostly denim jeans and graphic tees, with a handful of colourful jackets for the colder months. On the day of the abduction, she wore a brown winter overcoat over a custom-made purple hooded jacket with "McKown" printed across the shoulders above a stylised otter in swimming goggles, along with blue jeans, black running shoes, and a yellow t-shirt with a stylised bee and the slogan "Bee Kind" over the left breast.

Biography: Evie Jessica McKown was born on the 8th of March 2003, to parents Jacob McKown and Jessica McKown (née Eldridge) at Massachusetts General Hospital in Boston. The family lived in Somerville for Evie's early years, and four years later were joined by her younger brother, Davis Jacob McKown. Having benefitted from Jacob's grandparents buying the home when prices were lower following the Second World War, the McKowns would later take advantage of the gentrification of the neighbourhood and sold up to move to Salem in 2013, coinciding with Evie's move from elementary to middle school. With Jacob working remotely as a data architect for Iron Mountain, Evie and her brother enjoyed a comfortable upbringing with their father at home more often than not whilst their mother continued to commute to Lynn where she teaches at Ingalls Elementary.

Growing up, Evie developed a strong attachment to animals: the family had a pet dog, and she herself kept a hamster. At an early age, an innocent question about where meat came from resulted in her ultimately choosing to give up eating it entirely. Bemused at first, her parents accommodated the change anyway. They expected it to be a passing phase, but Evie persisted, and eventually the reverse became true and the rest of the family adopted vegetarianism with her. As her brother Davis grew older, Evie got along well with him, and it was through this friendship that she picked up her enduring interests in gaming and comics, as well as her more tomboyish mannerisms. Unlike her father, she never acquired much comptence with technology above the norm; Evie can work a phone or a computer, but quickly gets lost when problems arise.

Though she had often enjoyed swimming recreationally as a child, coming into adolescence in middle school she began to explore swimming competitively: she joined a swimming club, the North Shore Sharks, and quickly progressed to become one of their more competitive members as the group itself was largely a casual one – this has contributed to Evie's growing a little overconfident in her skill thanks to her fast progression, and given her a slightly cocky attitude. Evie performed averagely-to-well in most subjects at middle school: precise subjects like mathematics and science were her weakest points, while her love of interesting stories helped her excel in English and history. Since then and throughout high school, Evie took a hobby-level interest in the local history of New England in particular. She also briefly made attempts at sketching her own comics starring the super-powered otter “Ultra-Lutra”, but soon became frustrated with her slow artistic progress and quickly gave up the pursuit.

It was at high school that Evie's interests solidified. She continued to read comics, especially enjoying Ms. Marvel and Doctor Aphra, amongst other Marvel superheroes and Star Wars stories. She also took up reading heavier literature and non-fiction for pleasure, which is where her passing fascinations with historical figures began to take hold. In her early teens, Evie dreamed of competing professionally as a swimmer, but on the advice of her father also made certain to have a backup plan: her love for animals provided the obvious idea, and so Evie also started applying herself significantly harder in biology and started to practice basic first aid with a view to studying veterinary medicine at college. Her grades in the sciences improved with the new injection of passion into her work and similarly to her successes in the pool, due to the relatively rapid improvements Evie's made, she's more confident in her abilities than her grades (hovering around high Bs and low As) should suggest. Meanwhile, most of her other subjects remain squarely average. Her skills in first aid however remain very basic: she can treat simple wounds and burns, and can keep and injured person safe and calm until paramedics arrive if needed, but lacks any specific qualifications or hands-on practice with tougher procedures like CPR or setting broken bones. Early in her high school career was also when Evie's early forays into internet exploration taught her of the ethical issues surrounding other animal products, and she began to convert from vegetarianism to full-on vegan.

Unlike many her age, Evie had a relatively easy time of the coronavirus pandemic, privileged as she is to have a comfortable home life and many ways to distract herself at home. With her father already working from home, little changed in that relationship, and though Evie's friendship with her younger brother Davis had become less close than when they were both younger, the two still got along well enough to be good company for one another, sharing many evenings gaming together on the sofa. This stability in the family likewise helped ground her mother through the stress of learning to teach from home. Because of this uncommon ease, Evie has trouble understanding the difficulties her peers had during lockdown, and is largely baffled by the idea of others not enjoying spending more time with their families and interests. Her one major complaint was being unable to keep in practice with swimming, and though Evie made half-hearted efforts to keep fit despite this, she's become a little out of shape as a result. On the other hand, her less physical interests only deepened during this time, building habits she would continue after things reopened. She worked through her backlog of comics which she hadn't gotten around to reading yet, and then ordered even more in when those ran out, ending up with an even stronger love for the medium and more than enough issues to last long after the end of quarantine. Similarly she pursued history more deeply, scouring streaming services for interesting documentaries to watch alone or with the family, and beginning to play historical grand strategy games on her own into the small hours of the morning.

Socially, Evie has many friendly acquaintances at school, but only a handful of truly close friends. Her easy-going and friendly manner make her easy to get along with on a superficial level, but her beliefs have proven a barrier to genuine friendship: overall, she typically adapts her everyday behaviour to suit whomever she's interacting with and relents from preaching about animal cruelty, essentially a social chameleon in casual company, but among closer friends, on top of more easily letting loose info-dumps on whatever her latest historical or fictional fascination is, she can't disguise her strong moral objections to the animal products others use daily and has a bad habit of passive-aggressively jabbing about them. Evie tends to get along better with boys her age than girls, given her interests and her tomboyish manner. Her usual social circle consists of boys both her own age and ones she knows through her younger brother, with whom she can talk about comics and team up for online games like Call of Duty and Fortnite. Though she enjoys her status as the one-of-the-boys-cool-girl among her friends and acquaintances, romantically she remained awkward and standoffish until very recently and for reasons she wasn't sure of. Both changed with a rather disastrous date in Spring of 2021: invited to visit Teddie Boyd's house to see his pet ferret, Evie hadn't quite been aware she was being courted until the meet up transitioned into seeing a movie together, after which the young man kissed her. Finally it dawned on Evie that she'd never genuinely felt an attraction to boys, only the obligation to feel one. The two parted on amicable terms and remain good friends, helping to support one another with their respective troubles of sexuality and isolation. Evie has since begun confronting her attraction to girls, and even though she regrets not having worked it out sooner, she nonetheless has avoided publicly coming out so far, worried about how it might affect others' perceptions of her.

Advantages: Evie is fit and healthy, a very strong swimmer, and has a basic knowledge of first aid. Her friendly demeanour and reputation for agreeableness may help her appear less threatening.
Disadvantages: Evie is cocky and tends to overestimate her fitness and intelligence, thinking she has more strength, stamina and expertise than she really does. She's also lived an extremely privileged and sheltered life on top of being particularly empathetic to suffering, which will make the island a major culture shock for her, in addition to the liabilities of her strict diet and objection to harming animals or using animal products: particularly the choice between starving or sickness.
[+] V8 - Evie McKown
“Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, man will not himself find peace.” - Albert Schweitzer

S004 Evie McKown made it… neither unchanged nor unscathed.
Last seen: In the Rec Room.
Equipped with: A single Walkie-Talkie.

M1 "Narrow"
P1 "Gatsby" -> P2 "sunset" -> P3 "Fire" -> P4 “Skateballing” -> P5 “Amaurot”
BH1 “Lone Digger” -> H1 "Lone-coming" -> H2 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Transmitter Failure" -> V8:2 “Missed My Heart” -> V8:3 “Dusk ‘til Dawn” -> V8:4 "Change, Death" -> V8:5 “Playtime” -> V8:6 "Alps" -> V8:7 “Already Gone” -> V8:8 "Domesday Book" -> V8:9 "Way Home" -> V8:10 “Cobalt” -> V8:11 "Two by Two" -> V8:12 "Kaneda" -> V8:13 "Rage and Resign" -> V8:14 "De grâce" -> V8:15 “Boundries” -> V8:16 "Slab" -> V8:17 "Graceland" -> V8:18 "That Girl" -> V8:19 “Wolf” -> V8:20 "Terror" -> V8:21 “Road” -> V8:22 “World Has Been Changed” -> V8:23 "Exhausted" -> V8:24 "Twilight" -> V8:25 "In from the Cold" -> V8:26 “Heart, Reprise” -> V8:27 “Blood” -> V8:28 “Arrow” -> V8:29 -Escape-
A1 “Dissolve” -> A2 "December"

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[+] V8 - Bethany Lyon, 05-07-2003 - 11-12-2021
“God judged it better to bring good out of evil than to suffer no evil to exist.” - St. Augustine

S107 Bethany Lyon couldn’t keep it up.
Last alive: The Sheriff’s Office.
Last equipped with: Ski boots, a makeshift spear.

V8:1 "For the wages of sin is death," -> V8:2 "...straight on 'til morning." -> V8:3 "Fissure" -> V8:4 "и засуху победим" -> V8:5 “Castle” -> V8:6 “Venom” -> V8:7 “Scar-crossed armor” -> V8:8 “Bright and Beautiful” -> †

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[+] V8 - Andrew Lapson, 12-03-2003 - 12-12-2021
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent." - Victor Hugo

S016 Andrew Lapson died alone.
Last alive: The Snowfield, near an abandoned campsite
Last equipped with: 300 mg Potassium Cyanide pill (consumed).

P1 "Mystery Science"
H1 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Beyond figure out" -> V8:2 "Lost Little Bunny" -> V8:3 "Snowblind" -> V8:4 "Daylight" -> V8:5 "Megaphone" -> V8:6 "Hills" -> V8:7 "Prayer" -> †

Wiki
V9 PLANNING THREAD, COME SEE THE FUTURE…
[+] The Future in Shorthand
V9
Heather Klein: multi-instrumentalist, perfectionist, anarchist, kind of unpleasant
Hope Hynes: baseball superfan, superhero regularfan, cyborg (arguably), total sweetheart
Leah-Kim "LK" Mitchell: gamer, streamer, gambler, serial girl-kisser
Mercedes "Mercy" Myers-Colman: horror connoisseur, pop-punk revivalist, theatre kid, party person

V10
Erika Bloom the girlfailure femcel hellgoblin
Danielle "Dani Daggers" DiAngelo the obnoxious goth
Ansa Kosekela the party-time skater
Tamara Tymurivna Lomachenko the HEMA horse girl
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Hello Dr. Adjective, welcome to your first critique! Evie looks really good, and she's temporarily DENIED pending just a bit of expansion on certain points.

Which of Evie's hobbies does she keep up with in the present day, and how? Video games, comics, and history especially just get a passing mention and I don't have a clear idea of how she engages with those interests and what draws her to them.

Does she still intend to try to become a professional swimmer? Right now, does she plan on going to college? Veterinary medicine is a pretty competitive field of schooling; does Evie feel like she stands a good chance of being able to go to school for that with her grades, if she still wants to do that?

What's her social circle like? You mention that she gets along better with boys than girls, but is she close with anyone from particular activities that she takes part in? How have her beliefs kept her from forming strong friendships; is she a particularly preachy vegan, or is there something else there that makes others not want to spend time around her? She seems like an overall pretty nice and agreeable person without much that would turn people away.

What sort of first-aid is Evie qualified to administer? Is she CPR-certified or anything like that, or does she just have basic knowledge of how to use the supplies in your standard first-aid kit?

I don't see mention in the biography of Evie overestimating her physical ability or first-aid skills. It's said that she's competitive, but overall it's not made clear that she thinks more highly of her abilities than is realistic.
Evie has since begun confronting her attraction to girls, though kicking herself for having turned one down in the past thanks to her own awkwardness she has not yet come out publicly.
I'm not sure if you're missing some words here or if two sentences got mashed together; either way it feels like something got lost in this line.

Post in here when you've added to those sections, and I'll give Evie another look! Feel free to message me on the board or on Discord if you have any questions.
"Art enriches the community, Steve, no less than a pulsing fire hose, or a fireman beating down a blazing door. So what if we're drawing a nude man? So what if all we ever draw is a nude man, or the same nude man over and over in all sorts of provocative positions? Context, not content! Process, not subject! Don't be so gauche, Steve, it's beneath you."
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Edited as requested! Hopefully an improvement!
[+] V8 - Evie McKown
“Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, man will not himself find peace.” - Albert Schweitzer

S004 Evie McKown made it… neither unchanged nor unscathed.
Last seen: In the Rec Room.
Equipped with: A single Walkie-Talkie.

M1 "Narrow"
P1 "Gatsby" -> P2 "sunset" -> P3 "Fire" -> P4 “Skateballing” -> P5 “Amaurot”
BH1 “Lone Digger” -> H1 "Lone-coming" -> H2 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Transmitter Failure" -> V8:2 “Missed My Heart” -> V8:3 “Dusk ‘til Dawn” -> V8:4 "Change, Death" -> V8:5 “Playtime” -> V8:6 "Alps" -> V8:7 “Already Gone” -> V8:8 "Domesday Book" -> V8:9 "Way Home" -> V8:10 “Cobalt” -> V8:11 "Two by Two" -> V8:12 "Kaneda" -> V8:13 "Rage and Resign" -> V8:14 "De grâce" -> V8:15 “Boundries” -> V8:16 "Slab" -> V8:17 "Graceland" -> V8:18 "That Girl" -> V8:19 “Wolf” -> V8:20 "Terror" -> V8:21 “Road” -> V8:22 “World Has Been Changed” -> V8:23 "Exhausted" -> V8:24 "Twilight" -> V8:25 "In from the Cold" -> V8:26 “Heart, Reprise” -> V8:27 “Blood” -> V8:28 “Arrow” -> V8:29 -Escape-
A1 “Dissolve” -> A2 "December"

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[+] V8 - Bethany Lyon, 05-07-2003 - 11-12-2021
“God judged it better to bring good out of evil than to suffer no evil to exist.” - St. Augustine

S107 Bethany Lyon couldn’t keep it up.
Last alive: The Sheriff’s Office.
Last equipped with: Ski boots, a makeshift spear.

V8:1 "For the wages of sin is death," -> V8:2 "...straight on 'til morning." -> V8:3 "Fissure" -> V8:4 "и засуху победим" -> V8:5 “Castle” -> V8:6 “Venom” -> V8:7 “Scar-crossed armor” -> V8:8 “Bright and Beautiful” -> †

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[+] V8 - Andrew Lapson, 12-03-2003 - 12-12-2021
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent." - Victor Hugo

S016 Andrew Lapson died alone.
Last alive: The Snowfield, near an abandoned campsite
Last equipped with: 300 mg Potassium Cyanide pill (consumed).

P1 "Mystery Science"
H1 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Beyond figure out" -> V8:2 "Lost Little Bunny" -> V8:3 "Snowblind" -> V8:4 "Daylight" -> V8:5 "Megaphone" -> V8:6 "Hills" -> V8:7 "Prayer" -> †

Wiki
V9 PLANNING THREAD, COME SEE THE FUTURE…
[+] The Future in Shorthand
V9
Heather Klein: multi-instrumentalist, perfectionist, anarchist, kind of unpleasant
Hope Hynes: baseball superfan, superhero regularfan, cyborg (arguably), total sweetheart
Leah-Kim "LK" Mitchell: gamer, streamer, gambler, serial girl-kisser
Mercedes "Mercy" Myers-Colman: horror connoisseur, pop-punk revivalist, theatre kid, party person

V10
Erika Bloom the girlfailure femcel hellgoblin
Danielle "Dani Daggers" DiAngelo the obnoxious goth
Ansa Kosekela the party-time skater
Tamara Tymurivna Lomachenko the HEMA horse girl
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Alright, looking very good and I just have a couple more questions.

Since Evie's been vegetarian since her childhood and is now fully vegan, eating meat would most likely make her sick. This can be added into her disadvantages, as her specialized diet would make it harder for her to meet her nutritional needs than for classmates who could eat meat while on the island (ie if they theoretically were able to scavenge or hunt animals that might be present), even more so if she refuses to eat or use any animal products at all.
Her skills in first aid however remain very basic: she can treat simple wounds and burns, and secure a casualty safely until paramedics arrive if needed, but lacks any specific qualifications or hands-on practice with tougher procedures like CPR or setting broken bones.
One little bit of clarification here: what is meant by "securing a casualty"?

That's all, so take care of those things and Evie should be ready for action!
"Art enriches the community, Steve, no less than a pulsing fire hose, or a fireman beating down a blazing door. So what if we're drawing a nude man? So what if all we ever draw is a nude man, or the same nude man over and over in all sorts of provocative positions? Context, not content! Process, not subject! Don't be so gauche, Steve, it's beneath you."
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In the immortal words of that one guy, "another one".
[+] V8 - Evie McKown
“Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, man will not himself find peace.” - Albert Schweitzer

S004 Evie McKown made it… neither unchanged nor unscathed.
Last seen: In the Rec Room.
Equipped with: A single Walkie-Talkie.

M1 "Narrow"
P1 "Gatsby" -> P2 "sunset" -> P3 "Fire" -> P4 “Skateballing” -> P5 “Amaurot”
BH1 “Lone Digger” -> H1 "Lone-coming" -> H2 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Transmitter Failure" -> V8:2 “Missed My Heart” -> V8:3 “Dusk ‘til Dawn” -> V8:4 "Change, Death" -> V8:5 “Playtime” -> V8:6 "Alps" -> V8:7 “Already Gone” -> V8:8 "Domesday Book" -> V8:9 "Way Home" -> V8:10 “Cobalt” -> V8:11 "Two by Two" -> V8:12 "Kaneda" -> V8:13 "Rage and Resign" -> V8:14 "De grâce" -> V8:15 “Boundries” -> V8:16 "Slab" -> V8:17 "Graceland" -> V8:18 "That Girl" -> V8:19 “Wolf” -> V8:20 "Terror" -> V8:21 “Road” -> V8:22 “World Has Been Changed” -> V8:23 "Exhausted" -> V8:24 "Twilight" -> V8:25 "In from the Cold" -> V8:26 “Heart, Reprise” -> V8:27 “Blood” -> V8:28 “Arrow” -> V8:29 -Escape-
A1 “Dissolve” -> A2 "December"

Wiki
[+] V8 - Bethany Lyon, 05-07-2003 - 11-12-2021
“God judged it better to bring good out of evil than to suffer no evil to exist.” - St. Augustine

S107 Bethany Lyon couldn’t keep it up.
Last alive: The Sheriff’s Office.
Last equipped with: Ski boots, a makeshift spear.

V8:1 "For the wages of sin is death," -> V8:2 "...straight on 'til morning." -> V8:3 "Fissure" -> V8:4 "и засуху победим" -> V8:5 “Castle” -> V8:6 “Venom” -> V8:7 “Scar-crossed armor” -> V8:8 “Bright and Beautiful” -> †

Wiki
[+] V8 - Andrew Lapson, 12-03-2003 - 12-12-2021
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent." - Victor Hugo

S016 Andrew Lapson died alone.
Last alive: The Snowfield, near an abandoned campsite
Last equipped with: 300 mg Potassium Cyanide pill (consumed).

P1 "Mystery Science"
H1 "Guys and Dolls"
V8:1 "Beyond figure out" -> V8:2 "Lost Little Bunny" -> V8:3 "Snowblind" -> V8:4 "Daylight" -> V8:5 "Megaphone" -> V8:6 "Hills" -> V8:7 "Prayer" -> †

Wiki
V9 PLANNING THREAD, COME SEE THE FUTURE…
[+] The Future in Shorthand
V9
Heather Klein: multi-instrumentalist, perfectionist, anarchist, kind of unpleasant
Hope Hynes: baseball superfan, superhero regularfan, cyborg (arguably), total sweetheart
Leah-Kim "LK" Mitchell: gamer, streamer, gambler, serial girl-kisser
Mercedes "Mercy" Myers-Colman: horror connoisseur, pop-punk revivalist, theatre kid, party person

V10
Erika Bloom the girlfailure femcel hellgoblin
Danielle "Dani Daggers" DiAngelo the obnoxious goth
Ansa Kosekela the party-time skater
Tamara Tymurivna Lomachenko the HEMA horse girl
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"Art enriches the community, Steve, no less than a pulsing fire hose, or a fireman beating down a blazing door. So what if we're drawing a nude man? So what if all we ever draw is a nude man, or the same nude man over and over in all sorts of provocative positions? Context, not content! Process, not subject! Don't be so gauche, Steve, it's beneath you."
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