Hello Yona! I'm Paige, I'll be handling Ren's critique. They're temporarily DENIED pending the following edits.

However, they mistakenly brought her to an anger management class, which failed to address their issues, and they came out of the class that summer feeling even worse than before.

The ...

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Hello again! Kyoto is looking much improved though I still have a few concerns that leave him temporarily DENIED , primarily with the relationships you have added on this second pass.

The timeline feels unclear on fostering to Kyoto's poor experiences with Stephen and Tristana to him becoming more ...

Timothy is looking pretty close! I have just a couple concerns left that leave him temporarily DENIED .

He was open about his opinions on this at school which would get him in arguments with other students that sometimes became physical, but not at his part. Earning him reprimands and tongue ...

Howdy Laurels! Ellis is off to a good start but I have a few clarifying questions that leave him temporarily DENIED .

Mainly I'm curious about the arc of Ellis deciding that his father and brothers are a toxic influence. How does this come about? You note that his primary coping mechanism with ...

Hello Ryuki! Apologies, but before we get to critiquing Dominiqua please make sure she adheres to the profile template . Currently there is a paragraph break between her Advantages and Disadvantages sections. These two sections should be collapsed together. Post here when you have updated her ...

I think Robin is almost there now! He is temporarily DENIED pending one small change:

As has been proven during his time at John Endecott, dropping this act is unlikely to solve these problems, as most of his classmates are unconvinced that it is an act in the slightest , and those that are ...

Hello Deamon! Jessica looks great but she is temporarily DENIED given:

Hobbies and Interests: Climbing, volleyball, hiking, ecology, skateboarding, annoying that bitch Mallory

As valid a hobby as this seems from the context provided, it doesn't fit with the neutral tone we aim for in profiles ...

Hey Ohm! Timothy is off to a great start but I have a couple of small concerns that leave him temporarily DENIED .

How politically active is Timothy? Does he just get into arguments or is he an active demonstrator, campaigner, etc.? Massachusetts is a fairly progressive area and the only strong ...

Hello AnimeNerd! I'm Paige and I'll be critiquing Kyoto for pregame. On this pass he's temporarily DENIED with the following notes:

It’s clear to anyone that sees him that he’s worked for years to achieve his muscular form.
His eyebrows are bushy, and there’s a notable break on his right eyebrow ...