All requested edits made, along with a few you didn't ask for! I've logged the ones that are less easy to find below.

- Re: how Vivian's parents reacted to her change, I added this paragraph:

Vivian's transformation was received much less well at home. Dae-hyun and ji-yoon, still reeling from ...

Name: Vivian Cho
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Southwest Red Rock High School
Hobbies and Interests: Theatre, drag, cheerleading, pop art

Appearance: Vivian stands 5’4” and weighs 112 pounds. She has a lithe, fit build, with toned arms and legs and minimal body fat throughout ...

For my V8 kids:

Eden

I don't know that Eden would ever escape his self-destructive tendencies. He's self-destructive as a way to cope with his self-loathing tendencies, but all his self-destructive actions also hurt people and cause him to loathe himself more, and it's a vicious cycle that he ...

Death By Glamour

Heya, Fiori, thanks for being the guinea pig for this style of critique! I want to emphasize again that everything here is just a suggestion, and that a lot of my comments are gonna be *extremely* nitpicky because of the nature of what I focus on. I've done my best to distinguish ...

Hi. Hello. Welcome. Here is where I'll be doing critiques. I will outline expectations, notes, and disclaimers below.

Expectations

If you want a critique and there are slots open, make a post in this thread with a note on what you'd like critiqued. I will only be taking requests for threads ...

Just the one idea, feel free to suggest others. How Vivian feels about Danny is gonna depend on just how precisely impatient he is with fools. If you have to push him pretty hard before he lashes out, she'd probably go "fair enough" and play down her airheaded qualities enough to stay on his good ...

Birch: "................yeah, y'know what, fuck it. I'd kill my parents for making me waste my entire fucking life. No reason not to at that point."

Alice: "Hm. It'd depend on what kind of apocalypse, no? I actually think we'd have a decent--not high, but decent!--chance of making it through some ...

board critiques my beloved

Character Name: Eden Zima
Specific Requests for Critique: I'd like something on the tough and nitpicky side of things, but not necessarily brutal. Focus on whatever you want; I'd appreciate thoughts on both/either macro and/or micro stuff!

All of these dynamics should work! Birch might yell at Mo from time to time if they notice him pushing the envelope with the girls he's hitting on. Vivian would turn down Mo, but less because she's unwilling to do hook-ups and more because Mo's just not really her type. She generally doesn't mind ...

Dootdoot

Finalists



In 2nd place, we have Drunk Walk Home, performed by Mitski at SXSW 2016, submitted by Mara! It received 78 points, including three 10's and one 8.


which means that in 1st place, we have, uh

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In 1st place, we have No Children, performed by The Mountain ...

In 5th place, we have The Lizards, performed by Phish at Madison Square Garden, submitted by boogie! It received 67 points, including two 10's and one 8.

In 4th place, we have Ball and Chain, performed by Janis Joplin at Monterey Pop 1967, submitted by Laurels! It received 73 points, including ...

In 9th place, we have Ievan Polka, performed by Loituma, submitted by pancapples! It received 46 points, including one 12 and one 10.

In 8th place, we have Bohemian Rhapsody, performed by The Protomen at Exit/In, submitted by Dr Adjective! It received 61 points, including two 12's, one 10, and ...

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RESULTS



In 13th place, we have 23 Minutes over Brussels, performed by Suicide at Brussels, submitted by MW! It received 13 points.

In 12th place, we ...

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Thank you all for coming out tonight!! We now present to you the following:


Contestants

zetsu
slam
tren
derarknight
Deblod100
Laurels
Fiori
MW
Dr Adjective
boogie
Chad
Rugga
pan

Songs

Mitski - Drunk Walk Home - Live at SXSW 2016 \
Loituma - Ievan Polkka ...