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Willow Carter

Posted: Thu Mar 27, 2025 10:26 pm
by Rootbeerpants
Name: Willow Carter
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: Senior
School: Southwest Red Rock High School
Hobbies and Interests: Piano, tabletop RPGs, golf, baking

Appearance: Willow stands at 5’7” and weighs around 135 lbs. She has a lean body, with slight muscle definition in her arms and legs. Her hair cascades down her back past her shoulders in a wavy pattern, framing her heart shaped face. Her hair is naturally blonde but Willow dyes it blue. Willow has oval shaped blue eyes and a button nose along with slightly tanned clear skin. She wears a pair of rectangular glasses at all times. She stands straight with proper posture at most times, only relaxing her posture when alone. Her voice is soft and smooth but cracks and becomes squeaky when she shouts.

Willow typically wears various colours of tank tops or polo shirts with a hoodie tied around her waist. She also wears skirts that go down to her knees as well as knee socks and sneakers. Willow has a small scar on her right shoulder from an accident as a child. She wears a grey metal ring with a dragon etched into it on her right ring finger and wears a pair of stud earrings with a blue gem set into them.

Biography: Willow was born on the 24th of October 2006 in Las Vegas, Nevada. She was the only child of Lewis and Mary Carter. Lewis and Mary had both met ten years prior at a fancy dinner that was taking place in the restaurant Lewis was head chef at. Mary was working as entertainment, playing piano for the guests. The two had taken a cigarette break at the same time and after talking outside both swapped numbers. They began dating a year later and got married in 2002.

After Willow was born both parents continued to work their regular jobs, resulting in Willow usually being looked after by babysitters most days. This led to Willow having a more distant relationship with both her parents, only seeing them at night when they were both usually too tired to play with her. Mary and Lewis did still try to foster a bond with Willow when they could, spending whatever time off they had with her. This didn’t help their relationship much, especially once Willow was old enough to start school. Lewis and Mary were adamant that their child would be successful at school and get into college. So adamant that most of their conversations with Willow turned into asking how school was going and if she was keeping up good grades. This did mean Willow had a good record at school, keeping up consistently high marks in most subjects at the expense of not making many friends. Willow spent too much time studying to really make any friends. This left her with a reputation for being a loner nerd among her peers.

Towards the end of Willow’s time in middle school the Covid-19 pandemic started. This forced Mary and Lewis to be at home with Willow but also resulted in Lewis losing his job as his restaurant closed down. Because of this Lewis spent most of the pandemic trying to find another job while Mary looked after Willow. Looking to find some way to connect with her daughter after all this time Mary sat Willow down to teach her piano. Initially Willow was hesitant to learn. She didn’t think she had the time to learn a new skill and was still uneasy spending so much time with her mother after years of only talking about school with her. However as the pandemic went on Willow found herself actually enjoying playing the piano. It was fun to learn a skill for herself rather than for school and she really enjoyed the tactile feeling of making something come to life. After the lockdown loosened up however Mary would stop teaching Willow, focusing more on her career. With Lewis also getting a new job this left Willow to play the piano alone, something she still did for fun now and again.

The pandemic had also changed Willow’s perception on life. She had spent most of her time in elementary and middle school studying and staying away from people. During the pandemic however she would see tv reports and posts online about people missing hanging out with friends or doing various outdoor activities, making her feel like she was missing something in her life. Willow’s parents had already enrolled her at Southwest Red Rock High School due to it being the closest to them. In her eyes this represented a new start for Willow, who decided to try and be more outgoing and make friends.

Willows initial attempts at making friends went poorly. Anyone who remembered her from previous schools didn’t want to hang out with her and her lack of social skills held Willow back from making new friends. Eventually Willow would find some friends by signing up for the school’s tabletop RPG group. Willow had only heard a few things about tabletop games, mainly about popular shows like Critical Role or Dimension 20, but she hadn’t seen either past occasional social media clips. Still what she saw interested Willow enough to make her sign up, hoping it would allow her to both gain a new hobby and find new friends. After a few awkward first meetings and attempts to learn both how to role-play and how to play Dungeons and Dragons, Willow did enjoy her time playing the game immensely. The ability to be a person she wasn’t was intoxicating for Willow. She spent many nights thinking about the various confident and charismatic characters she had made. In time these characters would help her grow more confident herself, as well as help her gain friends both in the club and outside of it.

Willow also looked for a sport to take part in. She mainly wanted an excuse to spend more time outside that wouldn’t make her parents worry she wasn’t spending enough time furthering her education. Willow’s initial attempts to join most sports teams were met with failure though. Her lack of athleticism combined with her requirement to wear glasses meant she never got past try-outs at sports like softball or soccer. Desperate to find a sport that she could compete in though, Willow eventually found luck with the school’s golf club. Willow spent some time watching golf games from the likes of Tiger Woods and Jack Nicklaus to learn the game as well as various YouTube videos explaining the sport. She also convinced her parents to buy a set of golf clubs and golf balls for her to practice with in their backyard. This led to her being accepted onto the team, finally finding a sport she could play. Golfing quickly became a nice escape from her daily routine as well, as she found the game rather relaxing while still requiring focus and commitment to play.

While all this had helped Willow find herself more and developed both her confidence and gained her a friend group, the extra-curricular activities did pull her focus away from her schoolwork. This led to a slip in her grades, not enough to worry the school as she was still within passing grades, but enough to worry her parents. Both of them sat Willow down to try and talk with her about her slipping grades before they got worse. After years of them mostly being distant with her though Willow ended up in an argument with them, yelling about how she was happier now than she ever had been with them. This led to her being banned from playing the piano and threatening to take her off of the golf team, along with being grounded for several days. Willow would relent after this and spend less time with her friends to focus on upping her grades again, but the incident would forever fracture her bond with her parents, causing her to resent both of them.

In early 2022 Willow would also realise she was a lesbian. During a tabletop rpg session her female character would kiss another female npc. Up to this point romance hadn’t been something Willow had put much thought into, her mind too focused on her various other pursuits, but for days afterwards it was all Willow could think about. She eventually resolved to try and find an actual girl to kiss in order to see if she liked it. Willow’s pursuit of various women though would lead to her being labelled and often ridiculed for being an out lesbian, cementing her with the label for at least the rest of her time in school. When Willow did finally find a woman interested enough to give her a chance all it did was confirm what everyone else was already saying about her. As such Willow decided to embrace it, being an out lesbian at school and home. Her parents did support her, but the already strained relationship wasn’t improved much despite this. Willow did also lose a few friends because of this and would face much more bullying at school.

With Willow now embracing her attraction to women she began searching online for ways to attract women. Most advice wasn’t very helpful due to either being male centric or based around skills she couldn’t or wasn’t interested in developing. Willow did find a few sites and articles saying women liked people who could cook and feed them and, knowing this is something she’d also be drawn to, Willow began experimenting in the kitchen. While regular cooking didn’t excite her much she did find herself drawn towards baking. This was because she thought most baked goods tasted better, smelt better and were easier to bring into school as a gift. Her romantic prospects didn’t see much improvement from this endeavour, but she found she just enjoyed the process of baking. It was almost therapeutic to do something often very messy and creative while also giving Willow something to do inside her own house without involving her parents. She has a particular fondness for cakes due to the variety of them and how popular they are with her peers.

In the present day Willow has a much different outlook on life than she did as a child. Her focus has shifted from having a strong academic mind into having a good life with people she considers friends. This shift in focus has made Willow more open and outgoing with her peers, giving her a reputation as a bubbly woman who tries to treat most everyone kindly. Willow being an out lesbian has also given her a reputation for hitting on various women and either being a creep or charmer depending on who you ask. Overall Willow is a happier woman who seeks companionship above all else, often feeling lonely when no one is around her to talk to or hang out.

Now towards the end of the school year, Willow’s grades are good and her parents are still pressuring her to go to college. Willow still doesn’t know exactly what she wants to do, with the only thing she is set on being moving out as soon as she can and living far away from both her parents.

Advantages: Willow is physically fit, having above average cardio and upper body strength from playing golf. She’s also more likely to join or form groups due to her desire to be around people and more confident nature.
Disadvantages: Willow’s requirement to wear glasses leaves her vulnerable should they be lost or broken during a fight or accident. Willow also has issues with people forcing her to do things or pushing her into roles she doesn’t want to do and may get into arguments or fights over this. Her desire to not be alone may also make her more trusting of dangerous individuals for the sake of being around another person.

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2025 10:09 pm
by VoltTurtle
Heya RBP! I'm the staffer that's got Willow today. Unfortunately, she's DENIED pending some grammatical fixes and additions. My comments are below:
around 135lbs
Need a space between the number and "lbs".
Her hair is cascades down
No "is" here.
It is naturally blonde
This "it" is ambiguous, as it could be talking about her face or her hair (even though I know it's her hair). Replace with "Her hair".

A few additions to her appearance:
- How is her complexion?
- What is her posture like?
- What does her voice sound like?

And an addition to her outfit:
- Does she have any accessories (besides her glasses)? Bracelets, jewelry, etc.
Willow was born on the 24th of October 2006.
Where was she born?
This lead to Willow
Led, not lead.
But this didn’t help their relationship much
You generally shouldn't start sentences with conjunctions. Drop the "but" here.
This along with her getting prescription glasses for being nearsighted left her with a reputation for being a loner nerd among her peers.
Glasses aren't typically associated with nerdiness nowadays, even among children, as they have become much more common. Just being good at academics and not having any friends is enough to justify this perception.
Towards the end of middle school though the Covid-19 pandemic started
Add a "of Willow's time in" before middle school and drop the "though".
as the restaurant closed down
As his restaurant, not the restaurant.
But as the pandemic
Same conjunction as before. Change the but to "however".
and with highschool
High school is two words. Also, you'll need to explicitly state that she entered Southwest Red Rock High School in the biography. I can't see a particularly good place to do this with the way the profile is currently structured, so I'll leave how to do that up to you.
But Willow would finally find
Conjunctions. "Eventually," would work better than "But" here.
schools table top RPG
Tabletop is one word.
Willow had only heard a few things about table top games
Same issue with tabletop here, but this sentence is also a fragment. Combine it with the sentence that follows it.
how to role play
Roleplay is either one word or combined with a hyphen (role-play).
how to play dungeons and dragons
Dungeons & Dragons should have both Dungeons and Dragons capitalized. Add a comma after the game's name.
Willows initial attempts
Need an apostrophe before the s in Willow's.
compete in though Willow eventually
Need a comma after though.
with the schools golf club
Need an apostrophe before the s in school's.
This lead to her being
Led, again.
a friend group the extra-curricular
Need a comma after group.
This lead to a slip
Led, again.
grades but enough
Comma before "but" here.
This lead to her
Led, again.
again but the incident
Comma before "but" again.
They would barely speak at all after this.
A fragment that's also not really a necessary detail, cut.
Around the same time
When?
During a table top rpg
Tabletop, again.
Willows pursuit of various
Apostrophe, again.
support her but the already
Another comma before "but".
All of this also lead to Willow developing a hobby of baking
...why? You explain in the next sentence but this is such an odd transition that I think the explanation should come first.

Also, led, again.

Is there anything in particular she likes to bake? Bread, cakes, cookies, pastries, etc...
year Willows grades
Apostrophe, again.
Willow still doesn’t know exactly what she wants to do though. The only thing she is set on is moving out as soon as she can and living away from both her parents.
Combine these two sentences.


As an addition, towards the end of the profile: could you add a paragraph describing Willow's general personality, outlook/philosophy, and how she is perceived by her peers in the present day?

This would be helpful, as several of her advantages/disadvantages don't clearly connect to the biography. This would be an excellent paragraph to justify them.

This would probably go best before the paragraph about her future plans (or lack thereof).
Willows requirement to wear
Apostrophe, again.
knocked off during a fight or accident
I think the concern is less being knocked off and more being broken. Change to "lost or broken" instead of "knocked off".
lead her be more trusting
Need a "to" before be.


...and that's it. Post back here when you have all those edits made and I'll give Willow another look!

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Fri Apr 18, 2025 12:50 am
by Rootbeerpants
Profile has been edited!

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Mon Apr 21, 2025 4:19 pm
by VoltTurtle
Heya RBP! You missed a few things in my last critique, namely that you're still missing several possessive apostrophes, a few commas I requested, and one "lead" instead of "led". Please go back over my critique and make sure you get everything before posting that you're done.

Thank you!

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Tue Apr 22, 2025 5:31 pm
by Rootbeerpants
Really sorry about that. I think I got everything this time.

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2025 1:53 am
by VoltTurtle
She's looking a lot better! Content-wise she's good, she just some grammar and flow fixes now.
After the pandemic loosened up
The pandemic didn't really loosen up, but the lockdowns did.
Initially this went poorly
This is a new paragraph so you need to re-establish ideas/subjects. Eg: "Willow's initial attempts at making friends went poorly."
for the schools tabletop RPG group
Missed (') one.
She hadn’t seen either past occasional social media clips though
Drop the "though" and combine with the previous sentence ("Dimension 20, but she hadn't") for sentence flow.
with requirement to wear
Her requirement.
This led to her being banned from playing the piano and threatening to take her off of the golf team. She was also grounded for several days.
Combine these sentences.
Up to this point romance hadn’t been something Willow had put much thought into, her mind too focused on her various other pursuits. For days afterwards though it was all Willow could think about.
Combine these sentences, the second one is a fragment.
though would led to her being labelled
This one should actually be "lead"! Maybe got a bit overzealous.
endeavour but she found
Comma before but.


...and that's it! Post back here when you have those things fixed!

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2025 3:53 am
by Rootbeerpants
Edited!

Re: Willow Carter

Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2025 9:59 pm
by VoltTurtle
APPROVED