BEST KILL AWARD:
KILLER: S017: JESSICA ROMERO [Deamon], VICTIM: S068: MICAH FLANIGAN [Laurels]
I think it's probably better if I keep my thoughts at a moderate length rather than as long essays—both for my sake (having to write all of them) and for the sake of people reading (if anyone does). That aside, I thought this was a good scene, and the people involved should be proud of their work.
Fundamentally, this death is the result of a misunderstanding. Joan's death earlier in the thread—from wounds sustained in her previous scene—is the crux of this. Micah ends up in the wrong place at the wrong time, and suspicion falls on him for a murder he did not commit.
I think the scene does this well. Ultimately, the main confrontation has Micah on one side, pitted against Beatrice and Rebekah on the other. What he doesn't know, though, is that Jessica has a gun in the distance. This situation adds a wrinkle that proves fatal to him.
All his attempts to defuse the situation ultimately make it worse. It's like a game of telephone. The longer it goes on, the more strained the message becomes until the scene has well and truly spiraled out of control. It's a great example of a death by misunderstanding done realistically.
I'll also include a selection of my favorite passages:
Gundham wrote: Thu Feb 23, 2023 11:30 pm
Animals in pain do things they don't mean to. They lash out. Cats shred their owners' hands, horses kick their trainers, zookeepers get bitten by everything under the sun. Humans throw fists and scream. It's just what they do. It's generally not personal, even when the animal in question is a person.
But it sure feels that way.
Gundham wrote: Thu Feb 23, 2023 11:30 pm
Only now did Rebekah realize that Beatrice was empty-handed. She hadn't brought the axe with her, and Rebekah didn't have it either. The two of them were unarmed, and almost certainly facing down a killer.
Okay, okay.
She put up a hand to the boy. "Easy," she said. "Let's all... take it easy."
Laurels wrote: Fri Feb 24, 2023 5:05 am
"Hey, yeah, we can take it easy. I would like to take it easy."
He glanced down at the dead girl.
"Look, I know what you're thinking, but trust me, I didn't have anything to do with this. She just dropped dead," he explained. "I swear on my family name I didn't kill her."
Laurels wrote: Sun Feb 26, 2023 10:49 pm
"First of all," he said, adjusting the dead girl's body so she was lying on her back, "what makes you think I shot her? Did you hear a gunshot in the last few minutes? Even with the announcements, you could probably have heard one."
Micah slowly lowered his hand to his jacket pocket.
"And second of all..."
He reached in and pulled out the pugio. He made sure to leave the sheath in his pocket and revealed the steel blade to the girls.
"...
this is the only weapon I have."
Micah pointed the pugio towards the girls, holding it flat and out so they could see the full blade.
"If I stabbed her, this would have blood on it. And it's not like I wiped it clean on my pants or the ground or on her."
Micah took a step forward to the girls so they could get a better look.
"I'll even show you the sheath if I have to. But like I said, I just happened to be here when she died. I swear."
Deamon wrote: Mon Feb 27, 2023 4:01 am
Micah took a step forward and towards Rebekah and Beatrice with the dagger drawn and Jessica had seen enough. She squeezed her eyes shut and exhaled then opened them.
Without hesitating further she pulled the trigger.
Laurels wrote: Mon Feb 27, 2023 12:39 pm
MIcah took another step towards the girls, still holding the knife at them. He was momentarily blinded when a bit of light reflected off the knife and into his eyes, causing him to adjust it so he wasn't seeing spots.
Before he could say anything else, there was a gunshot and then a searing, horrible pain from Micah's throat. The bullet entered the side of Micah's neck and exited the other, just missing his collar. The force knocked Micah to the ground, dropping the pugio into the snow.
Micah tried to cry out or gasp, but he began to gargle blood. He arched his back and clawed at the injury, his hands becoming bloody and his blood beginning to spray from his mouth. Micah convulsed for a few more seconds, then fell limp.
In his last moments of clarity, Micah thought about what went wrong. Someone other than those two girls was there and they had taken out Micah. Whether there was someone else in the group or it was a passerby, he wasn't sure. He wasn't conscious long enough to hear any more gunshots or chaos around him. In the end, it probably didn't matter.
He thought back home to the farm. To the weights scattered across his bedroom floor. To the spots on the ear of his goat Guinevere. To his folks sitting on the porch at sunset. To his siblings all crammed on the couch to watch a movie. He should have been there with all of them. The five of them came into the world together. They were bonded for life through that shared experience, and he abandoned them all to go skiing. He betrayed their quintuplet bond by being so stupid and reckless as to go off on his own. He tried to be cautious, but he wasn't cautious enough.
They wouldn't be the same without him, and he felt bad for what he did to them by running off for games in the snow.
He'd wait however long it would take before he could see them again and apologize. He was strong enough to wait.
S068 MICAH FLANAGAN: DECEASED
BEST DEATH AWARD:
HECTOR QUAYLE [Grand Moff Hissa]
I like this scene. It's a good use of a peculiar fact of this island—that there are goats—and the understated comedy is fun. Grand Moff Hissa is quite good at this sort of lower-key humor and demonstrates an understanding of that in Hector's death.
Basically, Hector—who has established and camp and is cooking meat—sees Greg fall down in the distance while suffering from hypothermia. Able to correctly identify that, without help, his peer will die, he goes to assist. A fatal error, we later learn.
In the process of helping the flannel goth, a mountain goat approaches. As Hector akwardly extends an invitation to his camp, he lets his guard down and daydreams. It is then that the goat strikes. It charges him, and Hector falls from the mountain while the goat disappears.
What happened to it, one may ask.
Who can say?
I like the scene. That's about it.
So, without further ado, quotes:
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sun Jan 29, 2023 4:44 am
This guy was done without help. Hosed. A whole bunch of them were probably making this same sort of discovery right around now, but sheer dumb luck had brought the lump on the path to the particular slice of the ass-end of nowhere that wasn't as uninhabited as it looked.
Not having to deal with anyone else for the better part of a day had Hector in a reasonably chipper mood, and the obvious distress of the figure perked him up further. Most of his classmates weren't cut out for this. They struggled while he thrived. It wasn't even that cold.
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sat Feb 04, 2023 6:33 am
Hector grunted affirmatively. He straightened up, holding the torch by the middle, which he now used to hoist the guy to his feet. Then he started off back down the path.
His movement was slow and painstaking, step by step, but each movement of his feet felt lighter. It was as if traction came easily on the return.
It wasn't from relief to have found someone else. Hector didn't care about his classmates too much. But he was meeting with success, and that pleased him.
Hector lightly hummed to himself, tuneless and drifting in and out of audibility. Ice and gravel crunched and shifted.
It felt like several minutes of walking when he spoke.
"Camp's ahead," Hector said. "Not far."
He gestured with the thicker branch and there it was, visible fifty feet down the path: tall stones, a faint haze of smoke drifting above them, a dim glow of reflected firelight dancing against the side of a boulder.
"Dinner's about done," Hector said. "You can share. Unless you're vegan. Or Jewish."
His brows furrowed for moment as he turned that over again.
"Because it's pork chops," he added.
He wasn't paying attention to the guy anyways. What Hector had acquired, what he now realized he had wanted, was an audience. He was doing well for himself. He was clever. This situation, terrible as it was, was grinding his classmates into paste, while Hector cooked dinner. He could be satisfied with that, but to be able to reach out and pluck someone else from the chaos for a brief time, then shove them back in with a pat on the back once he tired of their presence, felt good. He was in control.
Hector felt so confident that he let his eyes drift closed for a moment. His imagination took him somewhere else, somewhere far away that he'd never even been. The earth beneath his feet was tilled soil, rich and fragrant. Tall, leafy stalks grew as high as his head in neat rows. The sun's rays warmed his face, only wisps of cloud in the sky.
He was in a field—a corn field.
He heard the pitter-patter of goat feet.
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sat Feb 04, 2023 6:33 am
The young buck had been watching the strange interloper for a long time.
It had first caught sight of the creature during the waning hours of the daylight, picking its way along the path. It seemed hesitant and unsteady, moving slowly, and the goat had been confused. Was this creature injured? Or was it a predator, attempting stealth? Bipeds did not make intuitive sense. The herd had all paused to regard it, but had then returned to grazing when nothing particular happened.
But later, the creature had found a place to lurk, a sheltered place between stones. It was a place where the goats could easily scramble up towards higher elevations, but this creature did not seem to climb well. The goat was up above, at a vantage point the creature did not seem to realize existed, but still the presence of the strange being caused concern.
This intensified when the creature shuffled around and then did something, and a blaze of light sprang up, and then it did something else, and the scent of death carried on the air.
The goat did not understand this creature, but its presence was unwelcome. It was an intruder, and possibly a predator. Its clumsy demeanor did not mean it was harmless.
The goat had not seen the wolves for some time, but it remembered them. They had been a dire threat, and sometimes they used cunning to hunt for the little ones. Was this creature like that? It had seen other beings akin to this, but only in passing. They had not stayed like this. They had not made dens.
The other goats were further up the hill. Some slept. Others chewed scraggly growth, cropping the alpine grasses just above the dirt. But the young buck watched, alert, and when the creature came near, the goat saw that it was with another of its kind. A herd... or a pack?
There was only a split second to react. The goat had heard movement, but had not expected it to be two coming around the bend. In that moment, the instinct that took it was to defend itself and the herd.
Predator or rival, this beast did not belong here. It would leave, by force if need be.
Finding its footing, the goat lowered its head and charged.
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sat Feb 04, 2023 6:33 am
Hector's eyes flew open.
Wide, round pupils locked with horizontal, rectangular ones.
In the flickering light of the burning branch, the goat looked like Satan himself, orange light illuminating snowy white fur and gleaming hooves and thick horns that curved upwards.
The charge was only ten feet. The goat had been standing there behind a rock, hidden from view until a moment before its surge of movement. There was no time, and nothing could have prepared Hector for this circumstance in any event.
He let go of the torch, raised his hands as if to shield himself, holding the thicker branch in front of him. It didn't matter. The dense skull impacted him, and the horns caught him in the chest, pushing the branch against him with a crack, and the momentum rocketed him off the side of the path.
((Hector Quayle continued in
Falling With Style))
The goat was gone in an instant. Maybe it spun and ran back the way it came. Maybe it continued its charge down the trail, vanishing into the darkness with all the grace the humans could never dream of. Perhaps it miscalculated and followed Hector over the lip, tumbling out of sight with him like Holmes and Moriarty over the Reichenbach Falls.
In any case, the flurry of movement and chaos lasted less then three seconds. Then the night was still again.
Up ahead, tucked away in a sheltered alcove, a campfire burned merrily. Three pork chops, almost fully cooked, were propped up on spits nearby. A pack, almost fully loaded, lay on the ground, and aside from the typical contents it also held another three pork chops, raw, in a plastic bag.
With the camp's creator vanished, it might as well have manifested from nowhere.
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sat Feb 04, 2023 6:34 am
A long time ago, Hector had heard that when you fell in dreams, you never hit the bottom. He'd heard that you couldn't die in dreams, either. You just woke up instead.
That wasn't true, though. Hector had dreamed of falling and of landing. It was just, in his dreams, he flattened out like a cartoon character. He had dreamed of dying, but when he died in his dreams he just kept going, sometimes a ghost, sometimes without even that pretense. It didn't matter, but it was another reason he thought people were pretty stupid. They talked about dreams as if everyone's were all the same.
Grand Moff Hissa wrote: Sat Feb 04, 2023 6:34 am
There was this famous hijacker in the 70s called DB Cooper who jumped out of a plane with a parachute and a bag of cash. Nobody ever saw him again. Some people said he ran away and lived a life of luxury. Some people said he returned to the spotlight decades later as the director of a strange, improbable cult classic movie. Most people said he died. Some of the money turned up on the muddy banks of a river, and that was as close to evidence as there was.
It's hard to find bodies in the wilderness. Sometimes search and rescue operations pass by a place dozens of times, and then years later some hiker finds the corpse of the missing person right there. Everyone wonders, how was that missed? But even small parts of the world can be vast and hard to thoroughly comb through.
Eventually, someone would retrieve Hector, because he was wearing a tracking device. But it would probably take a good long while. For now, what remained was a campsite far above, a thief barely thwarted and three others not trusted, a boy who might as well have seen Sasquatch, and a number of lovingly buried and preserved caches of raw pork that would probably never be consumed by a human being.